• cheeseburger@lemmy.ca
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    5 months ago

    Really great and I want to share with my wife, but I sent her, “The Day Of Our Divorce Hearing” post from the other day without thinking and she got all upset. This poem sneaks in, “… and I was about to leave you”, so I think I’ll just write this comment instead.

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        5 months ago

        Aw thanks, that’s so nice; I’ll keep my eyes open. You always post great content, by the way, and thank you for getting me interested in actual poetry via your posts on this sub.

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          Thank you for appreciating them! I always liked poetry but until Lemmy I had never taken quite such a deep dive. There’s some absolutely fantastic modern poets.

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    At the risk of outing my ignorance: what makes this a poem? I have a hard time reading it with “rhythm” because it lacks rhyme, and the line breaks seem almost arbitrarily meaningless as well.

    I feel it is much closer to a “plain” parable, but I’m really not versed in literary science.

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      I’m uncouth too, because this just seems like extra line breaks to make it “poetic”. I don’t mind the parable, though.

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        Oh, I actually like the story as well, it’s well written and provokes thought and reflection, which makes it very laudable.

        I am just genuinely curious if I missed something in terms of classification.

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      My understanding is that to be poetry it tries to evoke the emotion captured in an experience. Frequently this is accompanied by rhythm and measure but certainly isn’t a requirement.